I think that red + golden gloss could work just fine, its just the amount of unnecessary elements presented here and low level of craft with the software. Like its being mentioned, you dont need that huge dock on the bottom if you already have quite nice taskbar on top. Also, why not including the volume bar in the audio widget? Seems like another unnecessary element there. Then, the rainmeter widgets for time, calendar and weather break the style of the shot with their simplicity in contrast with the complex look you were looking for in the VS. There are just too many things which I dont like to mention them all.
The overall idea is not that bad, but I would definetly look for 2 things before digging into it:
1) More experience with the image editing software to achieve better results.
2) Less is more. There’s no need to bring too many elements into screenshot just for the sake of covering the wallpaper. You had enough of elements with that VS and audio widget alone to make quite solid screenshot what composition counts.